Friday Fictioneers: A Great Day

Friday Fictioneers is hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields who provides us with a photo prompt. Each week’s challenge is to write a 100-word story inspired by said photo prompt.

PHOTO PROMPT © Sandra Crook

I totally cheated. I did a two-part story. Each is 100 words, though.

A Great Day (Part One)

“Sarah? Sarah?”

Little girls don’t just disappear from trains. Tori was positive Sarah was on the train. They boarded together.

It was a good day. It was a great day. She watched her through all the little shops. She didn’t lose her when she was playing on the rocks on top of the hill. They picnicked in the grass. It was the first good day since… Well, since…

“Why did God take Daddy, Mommy?”

“I don’t know, dear. I don’t know,” Tori answered, as she fought through the tears.

She was on the train. She was on the goddamn train.

A Great Day (Part Two)

He felt the earth quake above him. The shaking slowed, then stopped. It was here. The train had arrived.

He loved when the trains came. He loved to see tourists come and frolic in the little town. They always brought their children.

He loved children. He loved their innocence, their laughter… everything. He loved everything about children.

Later, as the train pulled away, he looked at the cage hanging from the ceiling, the cage holding the tender morsel that would be his dinner. It might even last a few nights.

“Mommy? I want my mommy.”

It was a great day.

26 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers: A Great Day

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  1. Oh no. Who or what has got Sarah? You’ve shown the stomach-churning fear of a parent when they can’t find their child, and you’ve taken the situation to its worst conclusion. Agonising.

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    1. I’m not sure what has Sarah. A man who is so far removed from society that he lives underground and eats children? A goblin? A troll? A dragon? That seems to be a popular theme this week. Gollum, as bearmkwa suggested? A robot from the future? R. Kelly? Or is it just Tori’s imagination manifesting extreme scenarios after Sarah went to the bathroom without telling her? The ambiguity monster? Only the imaginary goblin-troll-dragon-R. Kelly-Gollum-robot-from-the-future-ambiguity-monster-man that lures children into his underground layer with candy and iPhones knows for sure.

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      1. Thank you, Vic. It started as two seperate ideas. It wasn’t until I decided to make them one story that things got sinister.

        Thanks for checking out my blog today. I appreciate it.


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