Friday Fictioneers is hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields who provides us with a photo prompt. Each week’s challenge is to write a 100-word story inspired by said photo prompt.
PHOTO PROMPT © Jan Wayne Fields
The driveway seems like an odd place to set-up a tent. Instead of pitching my tent in the driveway, I went metaphorical. This is a story, not a cry for help.
Hurricane Rachel
It came in with a wave and a smile.
She came with a sweetness I’ve never known. It took no time before she was always on my mind. I could never wait to see her. She became the highlight of my life.
She had somebody, but I couldn’t fight my feelings. I fell hard. Finally, I couldn’t hold back.
She left me holding the shattered remains of my heart when she refused to acknowledge my existence, which I only made worse with my persistence.
It came in with a wave and a smile but left me twisted, tangled, and suicidal.
NobbinBlog 
Powerfully done – especially that ending.
Susan A Eames at
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Thank you.
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Strong emotions can do that, especially when they are so strongly felt. Nicely written.
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Yeah, I think we’ve all felt that at some point. That pain the seems too intense to survive, no matter what logic says. Thank you, Iain.
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Is Rachel the name of one of your dogs? 😀
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No, but it’s funny you ask. I used to get asked that often.
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Dear Nobbin,
The heart wants what the heart wants. Well told metaphorical tale. Lovely, although tragic.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you, Rochelle. I often feel tragedy adds to the beauty.
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A heart-wrenching tale indeed, and a brilliant take on the prompt.
My story – Gail’s Gazebo!
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Thank you.
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A well-told, yet tragic tale. I so hate when it goes to the extreme of suicidal…
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I don’t know. I’ve heard suicide is painless. I don’t think this would be as potent if it were less tragic. Who needs another generic tale of heartbreak? Thank you.
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To the person committing it…
But yeah, I guess so
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Good story. Well told.
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Thank you.
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A very graphical representation of infatuation. Well done.
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Thank you.
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Perfect title. Reminds me of some of those hurricanes that sweep through musician’s lives…
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Thus creating some great art and maybe some overdoses.
Thank you.
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You are welcome.
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One sided love may have the devastating effect on one person. Nice analogy with a tornado.
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Yes, unrequited love is tantamount to torture. Thank you.
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Aw, poor guy. She didn’t lead him on, for sure.
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He may have read more into the wave and smile and her sweetness than was intended. It may have been a mutual attraction but stronger on his part. Attraction doesn’t mean she’s willing to end her relationship for him.
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A tumultuous tragic story. Wonderful writing!
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That is a wonderful comment. Thank you.
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Hey – NO WOMAN is that unique! There are thousands of girls that would want to know him! Nice story!
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Are you suggesting that I’ve been lied to my whole life? We aren’t all special?
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Very, very powerful.
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Thank you very, very much.
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