This was written for Carrot Ranch’s Flash Fiction Challenge. Each week’s challenge is to write to a prompt in exactly 99 words. This week’s prompt is grit. I haven’t done one of these for a while for no good reason. I got distracted by other things and haven’t come back to it until now.
This is based on a book I’ve been equally, actively trying to write and trying not to write. It’s a huge project with a lot of research, and it’s emotionally wrenching. Sometimes I attack it. Sometimes I retreat from it. It’s about a man who’s looking back at his life while contemplating and trying to talk himself into suicide following the loss of his wife and daughter in a school shooting. It’s called A Pillar Of Salt. Maybe this will reignite that creative fire and get me working on it again. This is tweaked to conform to the prompt and not necessarily how the book will go.
“Now, I’m lost and I’m weary, so many tears
I’m suicidal, so don’t stand near me
My every move is a calculated step
To bring me closer to embrace an early death
Now, there’s nothin’ left
…
Will I survive till the morning to see the sun?
Please Lord, forgive me for my sins ’cause here I come”
– 2Pac “So Many Tears”
His Knees
He fell to his knees as a bomb exploded in his chest.
It was P.J.’s school on the news. Sae was dropping her off. She’s not answering her phone.
Again on his knees at the graves. “God, if you’re there, take me too. You can’t take them and leave me.”
Alone in the dark on his knees with the gun to his temple.
“Just fuckin’ do it!”
“She wouldn’t want this.”
“She’s gone. I can’t live without her, without them.”
“You have to.”
“I can’t.”
“You can’t pull that trigger either.”
“I’m scared. I’m too weak.”
“You’re too strong.”
I can see why you would need to retreat from this story for times. It is hard to imagine such pain and the conflict is loud and clear in your flash.
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Yeah, I have to make sure I have a firm place in the light to which I can withdraw before I step into that world. It’s too easy to get lost in there. Thank you.
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Reignite, reignite! This flash carries so much meaning and power. Keep writing this story to life even if you go 99 words at a time until you feel back at it.
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Thank you. Motivation and inspiration have been hard to find lately. Your comments have reminded me that I need to be writing.
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Powerful. Those conflicting voices make life difficult. I hope he chooses life.
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Thank you. In the book, I plan to leave it ambiguous, a tact I always used to hate, so, if you want him to choose life, he will.
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Interesting.
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